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However, others don't believe that numbers have any connection with good luck. They think such kind of idea is only an ignorant and superstitious belief. They will say: How can you ever have any good luck simply because of some lucky numbers, even if you don't work hard, don't have good opportunities and don't get along well with the people around you?
So far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter. Obviously, such belief is only a kind of superstition. Perhaps it holds true for some cases, but often it does not. Numbers can never bring good luck to a person at all and our fortune is in our own hands. Therefore, everyone can have good fortune only if he tries his best. Let's always remember "Opportunities are only for the prepared mind"and "No pains, no gains."
【点评】
本文之所以能够得到14分,除了结构清晰、句式多变以外,还有很多语言上的亮点。
首先,遣词用语准确地道。如第一段第四句中spare(吝惜,节约)一词就用的很准,形象地刻画出这类人的心态。紧接着第五句中的without any doubt(不假思索)的使用也非常恰当,提醒读者不假思索地相信幸运数字是缺乏辩证思维的。另外,最后一段中的hold true也是典型的英语表达方式,显现出本文用语的地道。
其次,适当运用修辞手法。第二段第四句运用反问使问题的答案不言自明,观点的表达更加有力。而该句中三个don’t构成排比,更加强了气势,使论证达到高潮。
再次,恰当使用警句格言。本文的最后以两句谚语作为结束,运用恰到好处,又突显出作者的文采。
最后,开头结尾突破常规。开头运用例证为主题提供充分验证,说服力很强。结尾用谚语收尾,使人眼前一亮。 |